Nowadays, many children have trouble paying attention in class or concentrating on their school work. Why is this happening? How can this problem be solved?

Nowadays, a large number of children suffer from taking care of their lessons in class and concentrating on other
school
activities at
school
. In
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essay, I will discuss why is
this
happening and how can address and create a sensible solution. Today, a lot of children, because
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we are in the technological era, are having a technological device.
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technology is one of the most crucial things in human life, there are many problems caused
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hours
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.
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of
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situation is
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paying attention as well as insufficiencies
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concentrating on various
school
works. To exemplify, according to a study conducted by James John, the likelihood is that
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poor concentration of those
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using technological tools phones, tablets etc. many hours far
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higher than other ones
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.
Thus
, using
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in class and at
school
can give rise to miscellaneous issues. With regard to
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, it is a conspicuous fact that
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parents and
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boards have to tackle
this
problem
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restricting the usage of phones in classes. If many people want to solve
this
, they have to embrace
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idea that the less using technological distractions, the more concentration on lessons.
For example
, Big Mayor Primary
School
situated in London is one of the most important examples in respect of solution. There is
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of phones in a certain place can try to deal with
this
type of problem. To conclude, there are many distractions in classes as
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students'
attentions
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and
this
might be solved with
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idea of restricting these devices at schools and in classes.
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