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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefit to today’s life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

Some
individuals
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 think studying from the past offers is unnecessary
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 today's life
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while
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 others believe that
history
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 is an essential source of information for us. In my opinion,
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the
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 crowd should not spend much
time
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for
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on
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historyI
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history
 because
history
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 is
a just
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just a
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time wasting
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.
Firstly
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,
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 reflects
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the
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past
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apply
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time
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. But people can learn a lesson from past mistakes. İf we look at the
world
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world,
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 we will see past always
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repeats
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. Research conducted by CNN revealed that most
of
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private
school
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schools
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 use
history
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 because
history
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 is a tremendous source.
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example
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 if we do not know how to make a
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commerce,
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 we will learn from historical books. The crowd should concentrate on
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 to
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reach
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 their goal. İf we look
books
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at books
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 and learn our mistakes
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,
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we
would
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will
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 not repeat the
mistake
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mistake,
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therefore
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, we will be successful in life.
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,
History
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 is wasting our
times
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time
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 because
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the
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past and
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future
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the future
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 are very different things. In the past
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, student's
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student's
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students'
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curriculums
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 were old
but
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, but
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 now their curriculum is very fresh and modern. Looking
the
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future
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 is a bright idea. Research conducted by Washington University revealed that
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future
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the future
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 is more essential than
past
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the past
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 because we can not change
past
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the past
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but
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, but
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 we can change
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future
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the future
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 with our decisions. People have a
lots
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lot
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 of alternatives
instead
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 of using
history
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. They can prepare
future
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 with new sources and they might
be
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take a scholarship. In secondary
school
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school,
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 most
of
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apply
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students use modern sources for understanding the
future
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. İndividuals can
organize
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organise
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time
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Instead
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instead
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 of reviewing
history
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. İf
individuals
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 want to overcome obstacles
they
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, they
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 have to focus on
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future
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the future
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instead
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 of
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being
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stuck in the past. In conclusion,
Some
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some
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individuals
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 believe
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the
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past is a huge
sources
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source
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 for improving
ourself
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ourselves
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but
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, but
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 some
individuals
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 believe it
is
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does
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 not work because it reflects
past
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the past
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instead
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 of
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future
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the future
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.

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planning
Make a clear plan before you write, with an intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
grammar
Use clear grammar. Check subject-verb and noun forms.
cohesion
Use good linking words to show how ideas go together.
content
Give clear examples that fit your points.
planning
Put one idea in each paragraph and end with a short conclusion.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
It uses simple connectors like Firstly and Secondly.
content
The topic is clear from the start.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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