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Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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The polyline graph compares the
number
 of UK citizens taking a ride on 3 different types of transportation namely car, bus and train over a period of 60years. Units are measured in
millions
. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the figure for daily usage of buses and trains witnessed and forecasted to have a positive trend during the whole span, while the opposite is true for cars. In 1970, approximately 5 million people in the UK travelled by car on a daily basis, while train and bus were used by 2 and 4
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 travellers respectively. By 2000, the
number
 of driving ones has grown to a mere 7
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 and the
number
 of railway passengers rose to 3
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. By stark contrast, a slight drop of 0.5 million in bus travellers was observed. By the year 2030, the
number
 of car and train commuters is expected to reach a high of 9 and 5
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 respectively.
By contrast
, buses are predicted to become a less common choice with only 3
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 passengers.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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