Question. You exercise regularly and have been a member of many different gyms. Recently you moved into a new neighbourhood and joined a new gym. You have noticed people at this gym do not bother to wipe down the machines after use and often leave dirty towels on the benches in the change rooms. Write to Mr Koto, the manager. In your letter: Explain who you are Describe the problem exactly Make suggestions to improve the gym

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Dear Mr Koto, I am Benet, residing at Park 1 avenue, moved from

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Friday. I am working as a software engineer at alphas limited company, located at south railway station road. It is to inform you that at the central gym where all the rules and regulations are strictly followed by the members. Unfortunately, I have noticed that some fellows are not following the rules mentioned in your gym manual and

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not cleaning the equipment after usage.

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, I would like to share with you that entering fitness sessions always helps me to improve my health as well as to reduce mental pressures. In order to do

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, required essential support from other members too. There are some folks who do not clean equipment after using it,

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, towels and personal belongings are always left inside the changing room which obstructs my daily workouts. I would request your special attention to improve the awareness among the members and placing few notices regarding cleaning equipment and change room will be helpful to them. I am attaching some images of the changing room and if you are required to discuss

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please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Benet John

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