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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first tie this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a campling holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear John, I am doing well and hope you and the family are in good healthy spirits. I was so glad to hear that you are pondering the possibility of spending the summer holidays camping. Let me give some of my thoughts on it, as it would be your
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 time.
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, camping brings you closer to nature, away from the hustle-bustle of the cities. The serenity of it will calm your mind and provide extreme relaxation.
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, there are different life skills you will learn,
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, setting up the tent, cooking, building a fire, etc.
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, there are some demerits to it. Weather can become extremely chilly in the evening and one should be wary of the nearby wildlife and take necessary protection measures.
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 to that, disease-carrying mosquitoes and bugs are ever-present.
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, there are some important steps that need to be considered. If you like, I can accompany you to the activity. Being an avid camper, I have done the activity many times.
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, we can spend quality time together. So, let me know what you think of the idea of going together. Yours faithfully, Nikhil.
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