Write about the following topic. With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

Science and technology paved the way for developments in all
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industrial sectors. Apparently, the new innovations in
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field helped
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society to take care of the
after
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elderly generation.
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it would be a pressing task for
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society to cope
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essay will discuss all these issues and the methods to manage the crisis along with the necessary examples, It is evident that the number of old aged
people
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increasing whereas the count
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youngsters
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decreasing. One of the main
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with
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increased care homes as well as caretakers.
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families
are only having one or two kids whereas the
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proportion
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middle aged
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people
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much lower.
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, we should be able to manage these
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by increasing the population as well as taking care of the parents
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their own
families
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,
people
should appreciate togetherness by accepting elderly
people
within the
families
rather than sending them to old age homes,
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families
prefer their parents and grandparents
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with them even during their late times.
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way we could avoid
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building
bulding
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building
more daycares and
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sourcing
more staff to look after the old generations
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society could manage the rise in
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population
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even though
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the earth and that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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