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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In some countries, some
citizens
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 think that the government should spend enormous sums of
money
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 on constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for express trains between cities. While some others claim that sums of
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public
transport
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. I agree that the government should spend
money
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 on the new
railway
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lines
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, but I
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 think that it is necessary to improve existing
transport
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.
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, each country should take a look at the
citizens
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' needs to know what they prefer. People would always prefer new
railway
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lines
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 for trains because it will be easier for them to travel to work, schools, etc. But if the existing public
transports'
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 quality does not meet the
citizens
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' satisfaction
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 it would be more necessary
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to
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 begin with improving the facilities than trying to construct new ones.
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, the authorities have to consider
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financial issues to select the most suitable plan. On the one hand, developed and developing countries will have more
money
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 to construct new
railway
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lines
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 to satisfy people's requirements.
On the other hand
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, undeveloped countries with unstable financial conditions should concentrate on improving the existing
transport
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. In conclusion, either spending a big amount of
money
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 on constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for the express trains between cities or using that amount of
money
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 to improve the existing
transport
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 is necessary. But how to choose the perfect solution totally depends on what the
citizens
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 need and the economic situation of each country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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