Some people think sports are important for society.While others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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of
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are taken as leisure
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.The reason why
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our body to be
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healthier.There are different types of
sport
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activities
in the world.
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,some
people
believe and say
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this
.It is a
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crucial
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crucial
for all
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the
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people
.Because of
this
many
people
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obesity
also
.And doing
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activities
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help
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for
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lost wealth.
Therefore
,they think about it.
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,some
people
prefer to work without doing
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activities
.Look at
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side
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,If
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people
peoole
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people
only do
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type of
exercises
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without working,they can not
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make
makr
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make
money for
living
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.The reason why
,
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sport
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for habit.Meanwhile,when
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want to do exercise,they can do
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they
tired
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their
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work or boring time.I think.
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,I believe that both of them
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important. In conclusion,I
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sums
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that
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physical activity is an integral part of the modern lifestyle my firm conviction is that it should be considered
as
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a leisure activity.
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