Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
Retirement
age
is an age
when every working individual takes a break from a job and gets paid for the services they have done for their company
. Some sociologists believe that having a fixed retirement
age
for everybody irrespective of their occupation is unfair, and certain workers
should be allowed to take early retirement
. I completely agree with this
argument and I will indicate my view with examples.
To begin
with, people tend to become weak as they grow older. Different occupations demand different kinds of skills. Certain workers
need physical energy to perform their duties. This
physical power and stamina reduce with old age
. While other occupations like office work demand less physical energy. Hence
, workers
whose endeavour demands more physical strength need to be given early pullout. This
can be illustrated by the workers
in the coal mines whose effort demands strength and stamina which deteriorates as they grow older. However
, workers
sitting in a library do not need to have much physical strength.
Additionally
, people who have served a lot for a company
for a longer duration could be given early evacuation. Certain workers
who have dedicated most of their life working for a community should be allowed to reap the benefits of retirement
at an early age
. For instance
, my father started working for a company
in India at the age
of 20. He was allowed to take early retirement
by considering the tenure of his work in the company
.
In conclusion, having a common retirement
age
for all kinds of workers
is unfair. a crowd whose work demands more physical energy and workers
who have served their company
for a longer duration should be allowed to take early retirement
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