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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born what might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadventages?

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Nowadays,
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 of the widely discussed issues is that social
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 is made
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individuals well-known all over the world, it is undeniable that the internet has become an integral part of our life.
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, there is no absolute agreement as many find it beneficial whereas others consider everything associated with it negatively. In
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 hand, both adolescents and elders become more prominent with the aid of
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social
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 oblivious advantage is that the majority of capable humans are able famous on
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social
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 as Facebook, YouTube and others as it becomes commonly accessible all over the world
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, it gives a chance to be
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 star and earn a fortune.
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scientific research, most
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youngsters
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the youngsters
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 utilize
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websites in order to be popular among inhabitants
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, they will earn more money.
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, there are many negative aspects and
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 of them is that technological gadgets
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 negatively for
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humans
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organizms
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organisms
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eye
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the eye
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 and memory.
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, it is highly recommended by scientists that many people should reduce to use
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 because
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 radiation from
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cellular
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can cause cancer and many serious deceases.
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,
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 requires more leisure time from
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internet users, as a consequence, they will not have enough time for their families and hobbies. In conclusion, having
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weighted
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 everything mentioned
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, I can come to
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the conclusion
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 that becoming prominent through
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social
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 have
their
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advantageous
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 and
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disadvantageous
disadvantages
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disadvantages
however
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 while technology opens the door to
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more opportunities in each sort of field.
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