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Today family members do not eat meals together. Why does this happen? Is this a positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past, meals were considered a precious moment for all the family members, but in the developing world today
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 fact has been reduced due to the tendency of
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 living in the house and they live separately inside the house. From my ,perspective
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 can be a negative development for the
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 as well as for the family lifestyle.
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 elaborate on the reasons for the issue mentioned above with examples.
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 with, each and every household has its own style of cooking with preferred flavours and other substances. If families get together and eat their meals at
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table
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 their habitual repetition will be maintained constantly, but if
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 breakdown, where
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 person in the family has a different time schedule for eating ,eventually the
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 in the family might suffer from the negative consequences of bad eating routines in the household. As a
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 will lead to falling in the bond between the
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, grandparents and
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parents
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 work day and night leaving their
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 with educators or servants,
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 they want to lead a luxurious life, but the family connection with loved ones is falling apart from them since they don't have enough time to eat at
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, gathering around a
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 for meals is a way, where
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 get connected to each other, they discuss their problems and
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 the solutions are within the family members, in other ,words
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 release their stress by talking to each other.
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 today
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 process is not maintained in a family,
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children
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 and
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 and other members lead to depression at a very early stage of life. They have no
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 to share their feelings with and empathise with them when they are facing hurdles in life.
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, if you live with your
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 it's easy to share your daily activities and your feelings, as they give you support. To sum up, eating together plays a crucial role in developing mental and social well-being.
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, gathering around a
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 for at least
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 meal per day should be a regular habit for
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