The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.

The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.
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The given diagrams illustrate the current floor layout of the ground floor of a house and its future for some renovation work. It is noticeable that the staircase will be changed and there will be a piece of additional kitchen furniture
while
the entrance door remains unchanged. With regards to the existing floor plan, there are two internal doors facing each other and walls on both sides of the hallway.
However
, in the proposed plan the internal walls between the staircase and living room will be removed.
Then
both doors are going to be transferred to the kitchen near the entrance. In the future, it is proposed that there will be new furniture be installed in the kitchen.
In addition
to that, the stairs are to be extended towards the hall
while
the store located under the stairway will be demolished. It is obvious that in the future
changes
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the living area will be opened without a divider wall. The front and back doors remain in their original position.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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