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Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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These years, everything is changing more and more dramatically. Some individuals find out that the key to becoming successful is change and they appreciate getting new
experiences
. But others prefer living in the same conditions and
also
 would rather have a negative attitude towards changing their lifestyles. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and say why I agree with
change
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.
Changes
 are an integral part of our lives nowadays. If we have a positive outlook on new
experiences
, we will welcome a fair chance to live a happy and balanced
life
. There is no denying the fact that resisting
changes
 can be harmful and leads to depression and boredom. We need to experience new feelings,
for
example
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 we ought to travel to new places, see new things, foods and people and learn more to improve our
life
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 to be happier than ever.
Furthermore
, new
experiences
 often open new windows to success. We can reconsider the decisions which have been made, say the career we have perused. Probably one might understand that if they had opted
a
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different career, they would be in totally different circumstances.
Clearly
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 we will understand that we had the power to overcome our fears and now we were able
gain
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 more fortune and pleasure.
On the other hand
, stability is more desirable for some individuals. A number of people
favor
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favour
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 being in their comfort zone and don’t aspire to take new risks.
For instance
, they have a family and responsibilities and
changes
 would be risky for them. They desire
living
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to live
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 in the same home and do the same job. It seems to me that they are just afraid of losing what they already have achieved. To sum up, I believe that
experiences
 in all aspects of
life
is
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are
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 more important than having an unrisky
life
.
However
, it should be considered to learn how to keep balance stability with
changes
.
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