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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #world #lifestyle
Nowadays, some
people
 think that living healthy in
modern
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world
 is really difficult. But others think if they want to be, it is easy to be healthy and fit. I think it is not very hard to be healthy in
urban
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the urban
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world
. There are some problems
about
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 living in
modern
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the modern
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world
.
First
, the quality of air in
modern
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a modern
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city
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 is bad due to
a
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 huge amount of cars.
In addition
, the food in
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the restaurant
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restaurant
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 is unhealthy, which has too much oil or
very
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 spicy.
Besides
, many adults cannot sleep early since they need to finish their work tasks. What is more,
people
 who work too much
time
 in a day will sit on their chairs for a long
time
,
it
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 means that they could not spend much
time
 on exercise.
However
,
people
also
 have opportunities to be healthy.
People
 can
went
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 to
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a suburb
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suburb
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suburbs
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 or
park
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parks
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 to enjoy in
fresh
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the fresh
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 air and natural environment. And, cooking by
yourself
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ourselves
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 is beneficial for us because we can taste our
favorite
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favourite
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 food, and the point is health.
Additionally
, workers could complete
works
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 more efficient,
then
 they will not need
work
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in
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night
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.
Finally
,
although
 life in
modern
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the modern
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world
 is busy, we can
also
 take
time
 to exercise. We can go to
gym
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the gym
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 or do some sports in vacations and daily life. In my opinion, we can have
healthy
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a healthy
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 life if we really want. I think that no matter how many troubles, we can try our best to have a healthy body.
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