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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #world #lifestyle
In
this
 society, flowing the country developed. Many
people
 have their own idea to arrange their life. Some
people
 believe that
people
 have a healthy lifestyle
that is
 very difficult, while other
people
 believe that it is easy for
people
 to keep fit.
People
is
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are
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 limited by their
work
. Everyone has a variety of jobs.
Although
majority
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the majority
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 of jobs
are
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follow the normal
time
, some
people
 should follow the unusual
time
.
For instance
, the
people
 who
is
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are
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 an actor,
he
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needs to do
his
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their
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work
in
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the
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night. And
also
people
 have pressure on working, they do not have
time
 to release pressure and have relaxation. They often need to add their
time
 on working. Other
people
 believe that
people
 can keep fit if they want.
People
 can use many approaches to be healthy. They can use their leisure
time
 to go to the gym or control
the
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 diet. To be specific,
people
 decrease the demand
of
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for
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 fast food
,
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 and eat some vegetables or fruits. From my perspective, I agree with
the
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statement 1. There are many necessary
condition
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conditions
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 that
need
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people
 to stay up late like doing
work
, carrying children and so on.
Although
 they can use their free
time
 to practice, they may not have
this
time
, the
work
 will occupy
this
time
 or other things. To sum up, the opinion that
people
 can be healthy easily if they want is excellent. But the opinion that it is difficult for
people
 to keep fit has strong opinions:
work
 limits
people
’s
time
 and they release pressure
on
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at
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night
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. So I suppose statement 1.
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