It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. What do you think is the reason for the growth in juvenile crime? What are some solutions?
In
this
modern era, some people often thought
that the violence in social Wrong verb form
think
media
has been increasing in juvenile crime. This
essay will be examined
the causes of the increase in juvenile crime and Wrong verb form
examine
provided
some solutions in detail.
On the one hand, social Wrong verb form
provide
media
are easier
accessible than in the old days Rephrase
more easily
namely
the world is spinning faster than before, especially the technology Rephrase
apply
such
as the internet on computers and mobile phones as well
. Rephrase
apply
Last
but not least, online games
are able to interact with others even though they do not know each other. For example
, there are many children who play online games
for entertainment and introduction
themselves to friends in online Replace the word
introduce
games
, the disadvantage aspect is the youngsters truly trust them. Moreover
, there are many types of people such
as the great ones and the worst ones such
as the crooks who will use other pictures for cheating
Change preposition
to cheat
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
gathering
outside and Wrong verb form
gather
doing
bad things.
Wrong verb form
do
On the other hand
, some parents
should limit the time spent on social media
. For instance
, some families have rules about how many times to use mobile phones for protecting
their children from social addiction until the result is bad. Change preposition
to protect
In addition
, the parents
often teach them to avoid and protect themselves from strangers who are known on the internet. For example
, my parents
teach
me to be aware of the people known on Facebook because there are various murders that kill teenagers on the news because it has occurred on social Wrong verb form
taught
media
. As a result
, it made the youth will protect themselves from strangers.
To conclude
, it can be seen that the causes of teenage crimes occurred
on social Wrong verb form
occur
media
or online games
. Therefore
, there are some possible solutions such
as teaching from their parents
and
protecting themselves and Correct word choice
apply
also
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