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Water scarcity is a serious in many countries. What are the causes of this？And what solutions can be done by individuals and the government

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It is thought that many
countries
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 in the world have faced a
water
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 deficiency issue in recent decades. Despite the fact that developed
countries
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 have their own sources of
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water
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, they could
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 import it paying tons of money while developing
countries
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 have not got that opportunity yet. I think that
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 scarcity is a serious
problem
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 which requires a collaborative solution. Humanity has
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spread
spreaded
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spread
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 to different locations on the Earth, and now some people live in places which are considered by others to be unsafe or even unlivable.
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, some
countries
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 have a natural issue
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 the
water
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 supply when
water
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 is in lack in general. African
countries
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 are the most vulnerable
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 when they do not have access to rivers or
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underground sites which could deliver
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 to their population.
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, Egypt had been building a new
damb
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dam
dumb
damp
 that was going to block a flow down by the river, so Egypt's aliases were considered to be in danger because they do not have other ways to get
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. As far as solutions are concerned, there are plenty of ways to improve the situation. Individuals might assemble
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 collection stations which are pretty straightforward by design, but taking
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 account that the
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 exists in the least developed
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 they could be out of budget for communities.
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, the government must sponsor the project cutting expenses
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 citizens, so it could be affordable to own the station. Charity funds from developed
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 should
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 support individuals because
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 is an essential element of well-being. In
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 I would like to emphasize that
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 deficiency is a threat to lots of beings around the world. If I were a political leader, I would have raised
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problem
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 already in my society finding solutions
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 as
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 collection stations because supply is limited. I recommend raising the
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 as soon as possible.

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