In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Disuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some areas around the world ,some people argue that it is important to allocate
large
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amount
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of
money
on
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building new railway lines for super fast
train
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trains
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between towns ,while others consider that
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money
better
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spent on redeveloping current public
transport
.
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essay will discuss both
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view
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and argue why I strongly believe that it is important to
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more railways .
To begin
with ,
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spending
money
to improve preexisting public
transport
is a very
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reasonable
option, and
that is
because some of these countries
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the facilities
,
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nor the appropriate infrastructure to construct railways.
moreover
,a lot of them
dont
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don't
have trains
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begin with .
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result
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it will be wiser and more practical to allocate some
money
to improve the current means of public
transport
.
For example
,RWANDA ,a country that once
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very poor country with a very poor transportation system ,chose to
spent
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money
on lifting up the state of public transportation so that some
money
will go on to improve other sectors ,and the result was
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improvement in all aspects,
On the other hand
,.
although
allocating large sums of
money
on
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trains and
railway
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railways
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can cost the country a fortune,
on
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the long term it has many benefits .
Firstly
,there are more safe ,leading to
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the
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rate of road traffic
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,
secondly
, there are a lot faster and more time
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effective
,which will
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a lot of time for citizens.
Finally
,they will help to left up the city profile as it will decrease the amount of
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public
puplic
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public
transport
woundring
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wondering
around the streets.
as a result
, I believe that the city official should invest more in constructing the railways. In conclusion ,there is
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debate about whether it is worth it to
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money
on
railway
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,or on improving current public
transport
.I stand by the
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opinion as it carries with it a number of
benefit
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.
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