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Many people think that students should be allowed to choose the subjects that they study in school, whereas others feel that they should study a set curriculum. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, Most
people
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 believe that
students
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 should get free to select the
subjects
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 that they going to
study
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 in school, under other conditions feel that they should
study
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 a set
curriculum
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.
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this
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 essay should discuss both sides and give a personal point of view.
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 with, the vast majority of
people
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 think that
students
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 should have the right to choose the courses that they
study
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 in universities.
students
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 know about their strengths and weak point so
schools
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 should have more respect for the
students
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' choices.
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, some
students
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 are weak in a few
subjects
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 so if
schools
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 management and parents Allow them to choose their
subjects
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.
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, In Pakistan,
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 government is so strict about studies but they allow their
students
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 to choose their ideal
subjects
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.
furthermore
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,
people
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 think that
schools
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 allowed should
students
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 to choose their ideal
subjects
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 because
students
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 self satisfies with their selection of
subjects
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also
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 take while studying them.
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, according to
people
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 and society survey
people
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 says that
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students
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 self-satisfied and get more focus on their goals.
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,
people
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 think that
schools
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 should provide them set
curriculum
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 because they are used to it to do hard work and
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 adjust in every situation.
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,
students
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 should get their personal choice in future so should put their decision. To illustrate, my aunty is not used to setting
curriculum
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 but putting decisions on them so get used to it and now she is a successful person Masha Allah. To sum up, the vast majority of
people
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 think that
students
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 should right to choose
subjects
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 in their
schools
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.
Although
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, some
people
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 think that should set the
curriculum
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 where they
study
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. In my opinion,
students
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 allow choosing their
subjects
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 in their
schools
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 because they know about their strengths and weak points and self-satisfaction.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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