IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

The bar chart shows information about the production and
consumption
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 in the top ten
countries
Use synonyms
 in 2014. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that all
countries
Use synonyms
 produced more
electricity
Use synonyms
 than they consumed except Germany. Looking into the details, China and United States are the largest producers and consumers of
electricity
Use synonyms
. China is producing 5398
kWh
Use synonyms
 and consuming 5322
kWh
Use synonyms
 and the United States is producing 4099
kWh
Use synonyms
 and consuming 3866
kWh
Use synonyms
. Russia, Japan and India are the
next
Linking Words
 3
countries
Use synonyms
 on the list. If we compare the production of
electricity
Use synonyms
then
Linking Words
 these
countries
Use synonyms
 are almost in the same bracket. These
countries
Use synonyms
 are producing 1057kWh, 936.2
kWh
Use synonyms
 and 871
kWh
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 respectively.
Similarly
Linking Words
, the
consumption
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 in these
countries
Use synonyms
 is 1038
kWH
Use synonyms
, 856.7
kWh
Use synonyms
 and 698.8
kWh
Use synonyms
electricity
Use synonyms
 respectively. Canada, France and Brazil are producing
electricity
Use synonyms
 with a marginal difference. Canada produces 618.9
kWh
Use synonyms
, France produced 561.2
kWh
Use synonyms
 and Brazil produced 530.7
kWh
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
.
Consumption
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 in these three
countries
Use synonyms
 is almost the same and
that is
Linking Words
 for Canada 499.9
kWh
Use synonyms
, for France 462.9 and for Brazil 455.8
kWh
Use synonyms
electricity
Use synonyms
. The production and
consumption
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 in Korea are 485.1
kWh
Use synonyms
 and 449.5
kWh
Use synonyms
 respectively.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, of the top ten
countries
Use synonyms
, Germany is the only country which is producing less amount of
electricity
Use synonyms
 than their local
consumption
Use synonyms
. Germany is producing 562.6
kWh
Use synonyms
 and consumed 582.5
kWh
Use synonyms
 of
electricity
Use synonyms
 in 2014.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: