Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some claim that it is more beneficial for
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to read stories from
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than
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video games on a computer and watching television. I personally beg to differ with
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assertion and explain why below. The main reason why playing computer games is superior to reading
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books
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is improvements in
children
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's digital literacy. When
children
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work with the PC keyboard for a long period of time and do it consistently, they are likely to enhance their typing speed, familiarize themselves with more pieces of software and generally improve their computer skills.
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, young players can improve their
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an attempt to earn rewards and progress through the levels in a game,
children
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have to come up with various tactics and strategies that involve rapid mental calculations and thinking outside the box. With stories in the
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,
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are only presented with
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plain text, with some illustrations, which is not as engaging. Watching television is
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, from my perspective, better for
children
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than reading
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books
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. In my childhood, I was allowed to watch two hours of TV per day, and I used
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time to watch cartoons in Russian. Because those cartoons were filled with graphics, I could understand Russian easily, but when I read
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books
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, my comprehension was partial.
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early exposure to and an elementary command of Russian through TV viewing helped me enormously later on in my school and laid the foundation for me to master English. Spending time
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watching TV and playing PC games
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definitely more beneficial, effective and interesting than reading tedious stories
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books
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is especially true for
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born in the 21st century, who enjoy
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graphics, sound effects and intriguing visual content more as opposed to reading
story
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books
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  • Passive activity
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