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Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home discuss the advantage and disadvantages of this development

#people #work #home #advantage #development
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The given line graph provides the population rate of
people
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 who use the
internet
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 in three distinct countries; the
USA
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, Canada, and Mexico in the
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 between 1999 and 2009. Overall, it is readily apparent that
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internet
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 is gaining
its
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popularity
populority
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popularity
 over the decades among the three different countries.
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, in the
first
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year
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, 1999,
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internet
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 was not a prevalent method for
people
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 to use, having the lowest percentage in all three countries. Among them,
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USA
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the USA
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 had slightly more
people
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 who used the
internet
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. While
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 number of
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 started to get interested in
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internet
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, there was a
dramastic
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dramatic
 influence
to
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 the Canadians,
which
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and
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 the using
internet
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 became hugely popular in the
year
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 2003. From that period, the population rate in
Cananda
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Canada
 overtook the
USA
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, and steadily grew reaching the highest point in the final
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.
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 and Canada,
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internet
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 use became more popular as well in Mexico throughout the period.
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,
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internet
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 could not attract a lot of
people
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 in
this
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 country compared to the other two. The ratio of the population started almost from the bottom end. But the country soon witnessed a fairly drastic increase from the
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 2001 to 2005,
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however
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 it was still only to the point where the
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 started from.
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, the percentage of
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internet
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 users constantly increased till the end of the
year
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • commute time
  • stress
  • productivity
  • focus
  • face-to-face interaction
  • social isolation
  • work-life separation
  • distractions
  • discipline
  • dependence
  • technology
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