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Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that video films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?

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The pie charts show the percentages of energy capacity between 2015 and a forecast for 2040. Units are measured in gigawatts (GW).

 Overall, the proportion of fossil fuels took the lead from the period started to future predictions.
In addition
, solar was the least sector at the beginning, whereas nuclear was expected to have the smallest segment at the end of the period given. In 2015, fossil fuels contributed the largest proportion of all energy capacity at 64%, but it was estimated to decrease by 20% in 2040. The rate of other renewables came
next
, which would only have slightly dropped, at 23% and 21%, respectively.

 Nuclear was 6% in 2015, and it was projected to come in
last
 in 2040, with only one-twentieth. It is worth noting that wind was predicted to go up from 5% to over double (12%) in 2040.
Likewise
, solar saw the greatest difference in the figure for energy capacity, which was only 2% in 2015, anticipated to be nine times the percentage in 2040, which was at 18%.
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