Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Nowadays we can see
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ads in all the
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surrounding
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and
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stop ourselves from them, so
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really understand that the
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advertisements
advertisement
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is totally planned
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professional
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well how they can affect
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people
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behaviors
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. I
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with the
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that saying that advertisements
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us to buy things that we really do not need. I know one of my
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friend
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friends
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control himself when he entered any mall to go to the
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between them and all the time his mind
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with
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phone
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his
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, all the social media, youtube and the browsers showing him the
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ads and almost his salary gone for
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purchasing
the
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accessories and new phones.
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, as a personal experience before when
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got the
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spend 14 days
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home and
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calculate all my expenses in those 14 days you can not imagine that the total amount for these 14 days was more than 2
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due to the ads in the online website, actually non of these things is important for me and even not improved my life just the offers took my attention and the fake discount which they
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for example
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purshased
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purchased
a new
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showing the original price was 150$ and after the discount 49$ only but after the completion of my quarantine
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went to the original shop for the
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brand to buy the spare brush and
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found the original price is 55$. Same
this
fake discounts
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sometimes
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people
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discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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