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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes .however, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent.

Indeed, the rank of
crimes
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 is increasing at an alarming rate worldwide. It is believed that
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capital
punishment
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 is a good way to prevent these serious
crimes
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.
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, others think that
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year-long
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year long
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 judgment is way better. The imminent essay will throw some light on why
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death
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the death
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penalty
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 is a good
punishment
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 followed by how
life
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gives
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 people another opportunity at
life
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.
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 with, there should be some repercussions for
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heinous
crimes
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. That hanging to
death
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 definitely
instills
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 fear in people and many
criminals
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 might think twice before committing any offence. To illustrate,
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death
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the death
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penalty
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to
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for
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criminals
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 of
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the
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NIRBHAYA murder case was one of the great
lesson
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to
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for
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 the rapist.
Moreover
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 ,the
death
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 sentence
ensure
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 justice
to
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 the victims and at the same time reduces the number of
criminals
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 in
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society .Protecting these
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hard-core
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hard core
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hardcore
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criminals
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 weighs heavily on the budget and
this
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 may create unrest among the natives.
By fixing
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 or giving the
punishment
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 strictly will teach a lesson to
criminals
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. On the other side, human
life
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 is very precious and no one
have
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right
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the right
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 to take
it
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by
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giving
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death
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the death
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penalty
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.
That is
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 why
,
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 the judicature should think of these natural facts by giving
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them a
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chance to overcome
from
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their mistakes.
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,
law breakers
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lawbreakers
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 in TIHAR jail have an opportunity to work and earn to improve their
life
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 after finishing the period of
punishment
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. Giving
a
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time to spend some years as
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penalty
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a penalty
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 proves beneficial because it improves their lifestyle in
further
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 future and helps them to become
a
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good human
being
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.
Hence
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,
tenure
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the tenure
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 of
life
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sentences
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 makes the offenders
to
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realize their wrongdoing. In conclusion, both
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statements are correct
at
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in
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its
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their
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 own stand as strict
punishment
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 for heinous
crimes
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are
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is
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 important but
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life long
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life-long
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sentences
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is
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are
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 a better option as it provides an opportunity to improve their mistakes . In my point of view,
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life-long
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life
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 long
sentences
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is
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are
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 a good decision to be taken because human
life
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 is a gift of god and it should be left
on
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 the destiny of an individual
instead
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 of giving
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death
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the death
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penalty
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.

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