some people believe that people who do physical job should pay as same as ple who have high level degree. To what extent do you agree o disagree
Factors affecting
the
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apply
salary
, which was always a
debatable Change the article
apply
has
become more controversial with many Correct subject-verb agreement
have
claim
that Change to a plural noun
claims
salary
should be equal for people who do indoor and outdoor jobs
while others reject this
notion. I strongly believe with the former preposition is more rational. In this
essay
I elaborate my views about Add a comma
,essay
importance
of Add an article
the importance
equalization
of Add an article
the equalization
salary
in the subsequent paragraphs thus
lead
to a logical conclusion.
Wrong verb form
leading
Firstly
, all the
Correct article usage
apply
jobs
have its
own dignity and should get respected. Physical work has body strain while Correct pronoun usage
their
white collar
Add a hyphen
white-collar
jobs
have more mental strain. Those who are having Add an article
a high
high level
Add a hyphen
high-level
degree
may Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
do
have Unnecessary verb
apply
better thinking
skills and knowledge from their studies. Add a hyphen
better-thinking
Also
, may they can have high level
management skills and communication skills. But for the execution of Add a hyphen
high-level
Add an article
the task
a task
task
, others are Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
also
equally important. For an instance, in a home
both parents are working and a maid is taking care of Add a comma
,home
kids
and household Correct article usage
the kids
works
. In Fix the agreement mistake
work
this
scenario, we should consider equalization of payment
because parents and the maid are spending equal
amount of time Add an article
an equal
of
their life for the work.
Change preposition
in
Secondly
, while considering the
society, all the works are equally important. To elaborate, cleaner is equally important as a manager. Because of the Correct article usage
apply
differentiation
status and Replace the word
different
salary
of people in Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
this
society, new
generation is always looking for a white-collar job to get high Add an article
a new
the new
payment
and they are not ready to do the physical works that
Correct pronoun usage
which
Change the verb form
result
results
high demand Add the preposition
inresults
fromresults
of
Change preposition
for
laborer
than Change the spelling
labourer
a
Correct article usage
apply
manger
. Correct your spelling
manager
This
negative attitude of young
generation leads Correct article usage
the young
joblessness
for millions of job seekers meanwhile high demand for Change preposition
to joblessness
manual
Add an article
the manual
a manual
worker
. Fix the agreement mistake
workers
This
scenario harm the country’s financial stability. All the people will come forward to do all the jobs
irrespective of their educational qualification if the payment
for all the jobs
are consider
the same.
To conclude, the government should consider equalization of Change the verb form
are considered
payment
for all the
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apply
jobs
to get the
equilibrium in Correct article usage
an
the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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