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Life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon

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The diagrams show different stages of the life cycle of
salmon
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 fish. Overall, It all starts with laying
eggs
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 in the upper
river
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 and by passing different stages they ended up in the sea as adult
salmon
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. Looking into the details,
Salmon
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 fish lay
eggs
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 at the bottom of small reefs and stones. These
eggs
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 are laid in the upper
river
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, where water flow is slow.
Eggs
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 are hatched in the upper
river
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 and small
fishes
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 from these
eggs
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 start growing. These
fishes
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 remained in slow water for the
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 5-6 months. After passing initial 5-6 months
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 these small
fishes
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 called fry with the size of 3-8 cm moved to lower rivers. In the lower
river
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 water flowed fast and
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 fry remained there for the
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 4 years. Once these
fishes
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 are grown into smolt and their sizes are approximately 12-15 cm
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 these smolt go to the open sea. In open seas, they spend their life which is around 5 years. The average size of adult
salmon
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 is about 70-76 cm. At the end of their life cycle, these
salmon
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 again go to the
river
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 and lay their
eggs
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 for the reproductivity of their species.
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