Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behaviour. Others say that amount of time spent watching television influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give own opinion.

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completely negative impact on Children's behaviour, I believe the

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influence

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influence

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in both positive and negative ways. It is true that there many drawbacks when

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take several hours in front of the screen of

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television

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activities or communicating with their peers.

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, it can make

youngst

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youngest

lead a sedentary lifestyle.

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trend may cause many mental issues like depression, as well as

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physical

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problems like

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eyesight.

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watching

, that means that they do not have too much time staying with their family and friends.

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cause isolation and in the future, they may find that it is considerably hard for them to

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integrate

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society. Apart from these disadvantages mentioned above. I would argue the

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programs can impact the younger

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from both positive and

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perspectives. On the one hand, some

programs are informative and educational,

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provide

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and interesting videos. Compared with class courses, they are more attractive for

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children

chirldren

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children

to gain knowledge and skills.

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teenagers

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teenagers

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to like to emulate the actions of actors and actresses, and some

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trend probably causes youth crime.

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, many fast food companies and Hi-tech producers promote

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their

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sedentary

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lifestyle

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Topic Vocabulary:

influence
behavior
content
exposure
attitudes
perceptions
aggressive
educational programs
curiosity
physical health
social skills
academic performance
sedentary behaviors
parental involvement
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