Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are theadvantages and disadvantages for the child having a large number of toys?

The world today is very developed. Many policies have been introduced to create
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equality
,and
fairness
for
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society
. Some
people
think
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number of
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male and
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male and
female
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in every subject.
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believe
that is
an unacceptable policy. But for me,
fairness
and
equality
should suitable for every situation
of
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society
. With the
first
opinion
, the acceptance of some
people
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equality
in
universities
is
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an opinion
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an opinion
that upholds human rights and
equality
, not
fairness
.
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believe that
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and female
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and females
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together in
universities
. The
numbers
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of male and female students in
everymajor
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every major
is
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equality
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as well. That
opinion
it
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helps to promote gender
equality
. Especially, women
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in universities
universities
inuniversities
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in universities
are fighting for women’s right to take up space in
society
are fighting to take up space and the leader should
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opportunities
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them.
In addition
,
people
believe that the most important
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which employers are looking for is
the
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leadership. It is something that has been lacking and that
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social taboos for a very long time in the world.
However
, if women have good leadership skills, social taboos can be eliminated. With the
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,
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believe
that is
an unacceptable policy. It is an
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equality
.
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of
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the policy can
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unemployment
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rate. There are industries that more suitable for men like
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industry and there are industries that
more
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suitable for women like tourism. That makes
universities
should not accept equal numbers of male and female students in every
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. It is
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because some industries require physical strength and that
not
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suitable for
female
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. As a
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,
the
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employers can not recruit the
people
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unemployment
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rate. In the
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, the acceptance of some
people
that
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create unfairness in
society
.
Consequently
, the student can choose the major that they wanted to and they should choose the major that they
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to. In conclusion, I disagree with accepting an equal number of
male
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and
female
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in every subject. I believe that if
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a university
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university
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with
fairness
and
equality
always go together, the world will be better.
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