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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some claim that it is more beneficial for
children
 to read stories from
books
 than play video games on a computer and watch television. I personally beg to differ with
this
 assertion and explain why below. The main reason why playing computer games is superior to reading
story
books
 is improvements in
children
's digital literacy. When
children
 work with the PC keyboard for a long period of time and do it consistently, they are likely to enhance their typing speed, familiarize themselves with more pieces of software and generally improve their computer skills.
Secondly
, young players can improve their problem-solving.
This
 is because ,in an attempt to earn rewards and progress through the levels in a game,
children
 have to come up with various tactics and strategies that involve rapid mental calculations and thinking outside the box. Stories in
books
,
by comparison
, are only presented with plain text, with some illustrations, which is not as engaging. Watching television is
also
, from my perspective, better for
children
 than reading
story
books
. In my childhood, I was allowed to watch two hours of TV per day, and I used
this
 time to watch cartoons in Russian. Because those cartoons were filled with graphics, I could understand Russian easily, but when I read
story
books
, my comprehension was partial.
This
 early exposure to and an elementary command of Russian through TV viewing helped me enormously later on in my school and laid the foundation for me to master English. Spending time watching TV and playing PC games is definitely more beneficial, effective and interesting than reading tedious stories in
books
.
This
 is especially true for
children
 born in the 21st century, who enjoy high-quality graphics, sound effects and intriguing visual content more as opposed to reading
story
books
.
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