As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure?

It is believed that
people
should take
risks
in their personal as well as professional lives. There are certain pros and cons associated with
this
approach. I believe that taking
risks
has more benefits than drawbacks and my
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is supported in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, in their personal
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, many
people
break the stereotypes and follow their dreams.
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, many girls today speak against the gender bias and restrictions imposed on them, without caring about the
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society. Due to their courage,
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ratio and female literacy rate in many regions have improved substantially.
Similarly
, some
people
invest their
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savings in mutual funds or share markets, rather than depositing in a bank or
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which are safer places to keep
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as these are not exposed to market
risks
. But
people
take the
risk
to invest their money in fluctuating markets hoping to earn a better return, sometimes twice as much as what is offered by the banks. So,
people
who take
such
daring steps have an improved chance of making a fortune
although
the
risk
of making a loss is
also
high.
Similarly
, in their professional life,
people
take various types of risky steps in order to attain their desired goals and positions. Sometimes they fail, but it is worth taking
risks
to achieve success in life. Elon Musk, the owner of companies like Tesla and Space X, is an inspirational example in front of us. He dared to make
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vehicles and reusable rockets
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when nobody believed him. But he toiled ceaselessly to become successful and now he is the richest person in the world and contributing a lot to
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the greenhouse effect.
Thus
,
risk
appetite makes
people
more courageous and develops their
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skills which cannot be acquired by merely following others.
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, sometimes
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can
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backfire. Failure may lead to broken confidence, depression and financial losses. But with persistent effort, hard work and knowledge one can easily overcome these demerits and become successful. Kiran Bedi, the
first
lady IPS in India, and Gautam Adani are noteworthy examples of
people
who with their courageous efforts and
risk
-taking abilities achieved tremendous success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cloning
  • spare parts
  • ethics
  • organ donation
  • regenerative medicine
  • bioethics
  • genetic diversity
  • synthetic biology
  • biotechnology
  • therapeutic cloning
  • reproductive cloning
  • autonomy
  • consent
  • morality
  • legislation
  • genetic engineering
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