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Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#students #focus #attention #school
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 to concentrate and they are not able to give
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smart phone
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videos
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their close attention.
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 they are spending a lot of
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 is that nowadays these juveniles are very enthusiastic, they want to get everything in their life very early.
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 both should have to perform their duties
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 in future.
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 problem parents need to keep eye on their kids and let them know that they should not spend their precious
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government
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goverment
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companies
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of
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 using these
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, if parents and government take stick action against social
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great care of their
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children
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 and citizen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distractions
  • focus
  • pay attention
  • lack of interest
  • motivation
  • fatigue
  • sleep
  • classroom environment
  • teaching methods
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • workload
  • support
  • active learning strategies
  • engaging
  • student-centered teaching
  • realistic goals
  • rewards
  • balanced lifestyle
  • screen time
  • breaks
  • physical activity
  • support and guidance
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