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A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch next week, but you know you will be working. Write a letter to your boss or supervisor to ask for some time Off. In your letter, explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch specify the dates, times and amount of time off you will need offer to work late or come in early another time to make up for the time

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Dear Mr Brown, Hope
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 letter finds you well. I am Yousra Ghoneim, and I am one of your loyal employees in your reputable corporation. I am writing
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 letter to ask for time off next week because I have an important occasion. The first point I would like to discuss with you is the reason behind
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 request. Let me explain the whole issue to you. Next week will be my grandmother's birthday, and she insists I attend. Not only does she
lives
Correct subject-verb agreement
live

It seems that the verb lives does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 alone, but
also
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 she feels lonely.
Thus
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, I should be part of the company
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this day
Correct your spelling
today

The word this day doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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. Another thing I forgot to mention is the time at which I will take off. Since my granny lives in another town, I will ask for 4 hours leave to be able to spend the lunch party with her and with my other relatives. I am asking for
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 time off on Monday 15th November. One final point I would like to raise is that I will be ready to accomplish any late work on the next day early morning before working hours or even
at
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the same day after the party finishes. Without attending
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 party, she could not have been delighted. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. I would be grateful if you could accept my request. Sincerely, Yousra Ghoneim

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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