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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income.unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problem if it is not managed correctly Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world . Do you think the benefit of tourism out weight it's drawbacks?

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quiet
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tourism
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youngsters
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 all are interested in
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can create a group .That group can lead
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tourists
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website
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 like tourist
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tourist places in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural erosion
  • economic dependency
  • sustainable tourism
  • unregulated
  • local economy
  • job creation
  • income generation
  • pollution
  • natural resources
  • cultural identity
  • tourist influx
  • global pandemics
  • political unrest
  • hospitality sector
  • entertainment industry
  • transportation sector
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