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some people believe that mordern technology encourages more social behaviour, others believe it has made people less socialable. give views and opinion

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Technology like smartphones and their applications are considered a basic necessity today. It is sometimes considered important for survival. There are many mixed views about the impact of social
media
 and technology. Many are of the view that it has made
people
 more sociable. While others believe that it has made
people
 less sociable. According to my point of view, it has made us away from our loved ones. It has impacted our lives so much that we don't even realise how we were and how we had become. I will try to prove my viewpoint in the following arguments. Technology and social
media
has
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 brought
people
 together from different cultures and ages. One can Learn about different cultures and traditions. They become more comfortable and flexible in adjusting
with
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to
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 different
people
. There are many studies and
researches
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research
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 that suggest that
people
 who are more technologically involved are more sociable.
However
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 my views are contradictory to
such
 studies.
People
 get addicted to social
media
 platforms. Platforms like Facebook, Instagram and WhatsApp etc allow
people
 to video call, chat,
share
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and share
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 images and documents. It made
people
 addicted and obsessed with it.
People
 try to spend their free time using smartphones. They become unconscious
about
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of
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 the outer situations and circumstances. It has made
people
 stop making real
friends
. Socialising more and
people
 became more
self reserved
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 and
self involved
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. They don't like to attend family functions and parties.
People
 replace their real loved ones with online
friends
 that
one
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they
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 can never trust. I have noticed many youngsters and
people
 involved and busy with their smartphones at family functions. They don't show any interest in talking with each other.
Also
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 social
media
 made everyone emotionless. Nobody feels emotionally connected to anyone nowadays. They all try to just take their emotions and love. It has made them robotic. To conclude, social
media
 has made
people
 less sociable. We might be able to make new
friends
 and get to know more
people
. But it has separated us from our loved ones and
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real-life
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real life
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friends
.
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 it distracted us from our goals and our dreams.
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