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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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In the present age, people tend to believe that, every county must is to produce much more
products
 which is a useful purpose. I believe that it is true and in
this
 essay, I will explain why. Convincing arguments can be made that increasing manufacturing is material for an expanding economy of the county.
For example
, economic growth depends on the
products
 made in the year of the state. Producing more fabrication enhances the economical well-being of the country. What is more, producing more goods is the way to increase salaries.
In other words
, the worth of
products
 rises
as a result
 of greater cooperative profits. In that way, stock prices get higher which leads to opening more employment opportunities for unwaged people and inspiring
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higher salaries.
In contrast
, some others may claim that producing more material can lead to inflation. Making too many
products
 can be growing much faster than the buyer's demand.
This
 leads to having too many goods, more money printing, and decreased demand which is a result of inflation. Having considered both views, I am in
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 of the opinion that the country should manufacture more which opens more job opportunities and increases countries economical state.
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