Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

In the present age, globalisation has put
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pressure on every
country
to mass produce.
That is
why many people think that it needs to be the prime target of all nations. Personally,
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I believe that
this
is crucial for
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economic growth, I cannot completely agree with the statement, since some countries should concentrate more on other spheres. On one hand, it is undeniable that the economy of a
country
will experience
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significant growth, because of
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bigger production rates and
this
is mainly because they are able to export their goods to a diversity of other countries. That way not only the economy is able to experience
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growth, but
also
it is beneficial for the citizens.
For instance
,
this
process allows companies to meet consumer demand at a lower cost. It means that people are able to afford various products, and in fact, they will have the possibility to buy indoor products that have no import taxes,
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foreign products.
On the other hand
, every
country
can profit from other fields, one of them being tourism. They can capitalize on the beauty of nature or even historical architecture and other original attractions of the nation.
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, if the government is focused on services and giving
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funds to advertise tourism in order
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any kind of attractions and peculiarity of the
country
, it can attract many tourists.
Therefore
, every year there would be thousands of tourists coming there and
this
would help to earn huge amounts of money. All in all, despite the evident benefits of constantly increasing production, it is not crucial for every single
country
. Some nations can perfectly profit from other spheres, just like tourism.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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