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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

#say #news #connection #people’s #lives #waste #time #newspapers #television #programs
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Many
people
 opine that
news
do
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 not have any association with the
lives
 of individuals and investing time towards getting insights about various current affairs either through print or mass media is
completely
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wastage
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 of time.
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disgarees
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disagrees
to
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aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 notion because
news
 helps in creating awareness and
also
 it aids in taking
decisions
 promptly. It is an irrefutable fact that
,
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 there are
plethora
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a plethora
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 of events happening across the globe which might have
impact
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an impact
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 on the
lives
 of contemporary
people
, and it is essential to know about these events through newspapers or
news
 channels. So, that members of society can stay aware and alert. To illustrate ,
news
 about
recession
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 in
US
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 certainly may not be
an important
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important news
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news
 for
public
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the public
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 in India.
However
,
recession
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 in foreign land definitely impacts
home
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the home
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countries
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 economy directly or indirectly.
Therefore
,
news
 programs and papers are crucial to circulate knowledge and wisdom.
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Moreover
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Moreover
,
people
 from all walks of
lives
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life
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 can take intelligent
decisions
 with the help and support of
news
 circulating platforms. Different
people
 in various domains
such
 as
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business
buisness
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business
 owners, students,salaried employees ,
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housewives
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house wives
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housewives
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 and even government officials can take
intellectual
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intelligent
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decisions
 in their own area of work if they are updated ;have knowledge about affairs happening all over the world with the help of
news
.
For example
, during COVID-19
rightous
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righteous
right
decisions
 were taken to protect
masses
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the masses
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 from
pandemic
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the pandemic
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this
 was only possible due to
news
 platforms.
Hence
,
decision making
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 turns out to be effective and efficient due to
variety
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the variety
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 of
news
sourced
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sources
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. No doubt, due to
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cut-throat
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cut throat
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cutthroat
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 competition in
news
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the news
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 industry ,numerous illogical and irrelevant
news
 creates chaos in society, but
this
 can not oversee
advantages
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what
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that
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news
 channels and newspapers
brings
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 into the
lives
 of common man and women. To conclude,
news
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the news
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 certainly
have
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has
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strong
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a strong
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 connection with
people
’s
lives
 as
this
 provides various information and
also
support’s
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supports
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 individuals
to
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in
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take
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make
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 mindful
decisions
.
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