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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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some
people
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 that following
news
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on
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 newspapers or on TV
news
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 programs, has no benefit for their
lives
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. I disagree with
this
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 idea and I believe everyone should follow what is happening in his or her country and in
world
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. Regarding the connection of
news
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 with
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's
lives
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,
people
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 are influenced by the following
news
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 in various ways.
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, the
News
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 lead and affect their political views and the decisions that they make.
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,
people
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 get informed about the president's attitudes about different social and economic issues, and they decide
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whether they vote for the same person or party again or not.
secondly
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,
people
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 gain much information about financial trends and disasters that inevitably will affect their
lives
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.
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, they decide which investment would have more profit for them whether a bank investment or buying a house.
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,
news
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 can have many profits by promoting public awareness.
News
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 make
people
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 aware of the
damages
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 that human life causes for the environment as well as animal species.
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, when a person gets informed about a river polluted by a factory's sewage, he or she may decide to cease buying products from that company.
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, when someone hears the latest
news
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 about the effect of consuming an animal product on
extinction
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the extinction
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 of animal species, he or she shifts to
use
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 more environmentally friendly products. In conclusion,
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public awareness that comes from following
news
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 benefits
people
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 in numerous ways and there is no doubt about the importance of
news
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 their
lives
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.
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