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Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.

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knowledge heartily which may
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 forever. That’s why
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 teachers should be bounded by the college and universities to
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 and see the things outside the academic
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 or theoretical view to practice
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learning in
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life
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why I have taken
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 with, spending
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 outside the academic world may enhance their knowledge
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 and improve
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 way of thinking from
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 to see the things visually
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 they are teaching in theory. To cite an
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, a faculty from
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 department would visit
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organization
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 like Amazon Inc. to look into their managerial activities as
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 they are managing
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each department and what
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 they are facing to manage the whole process
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, working
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outside
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 academic world with relevant courses may reduce their monotony in spending
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 in the same routine
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. At the same
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, it may help them to make the class learnings more fruitful by sharing
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practical world examples with students and they may get interested
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 on any topic of marketing in social media, if he or she has worked with any
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those who
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 relentlessly manage
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 social media presence as
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 promotional activities, he or she could easily give an
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, working outside the academic
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 could minimize the monotony
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 and help to make the classes more suitable with an active learning environment.
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, making must to do
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 for faculties to
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 outside the academic
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 may raise
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the rebellious
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 among them as
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 may not be willing to act corresponding to that.
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, it may preclude the efficiency
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 and conducting classes on
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 as they may engage in some projects or get interested to
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 with them. As an
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, a faculty may go to
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organization
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 to look into their matters but
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 he or she
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 their interest
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 or the
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 may offer a job with more benefits than his or her current job.
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 may change their mood and induce them to join their
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. In conclusion, when there may have
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 possibility of negative consequences for making the faculties forced to
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 outside the academic
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, the positive results may exceed
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 with more benefits among universities, faculties, and students.

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