Every country should have a free healthcare service, if this means the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Any country must have gratis health care service
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most
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medical remedy is untouchable via the public service because
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have costly payments/they are extremely costly. I partially agree with
this
opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. I agree with
this
scenario because if it was upside down, the
governments
had to make a huge charge for handling
this
and the most important way of revenue
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governments
is income from tax. The
governments
mUst take drastic steps to take more taxes and
this
is a very important problem.
This
action may cause a lot of
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on People in the lower quadrant. So the
governments
are incapable of getting more taxes for the
reason
that was said/mentioned. The
second
reason
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why I agree is that the rich guys have their own money and when they need the latest medical remedies they can spend a lot of money
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that and they wouldn't rather spend money
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tax
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. The
first
reason
that I disagree, is again related to the lower quadrant of
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society because
this
group of society can hardly pay the bills of high medical remedies so they are doomed to bear pain because they cannot perfectly pay the bills. So free high medical
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can perform a key role in their level of health. And the
last
but not least
reason
why I disagree with
this
opinion is, the free high medical remedies contribute to improving the healthy level of the society and
this
subject can occupy an axial role in the improvement of a country.
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