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Every country should have a free healthcare service, if this means the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health
 is one of the most important issues in the whole world. All governments should make all attempts at providing people with
health
 so they must have a free
healthcare
 service even if it contributes to
latest
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 medical treatment not being available because they are very expensive . I totally agree with
this
 opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in The following paragraphs. Every human has the right to live
health
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 and happiness but sometimes poverty contributes to
death
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 of a human because he does not have enough
money
 for
healthcare
service
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 and it is very sad;
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 your child is sick and because of the price you should pay, you can’t take your child to hospital your child may die because of poverty only. So I think
healthcare
 must be free. Having free
health
 care is very expensive for governments so it is normal if they cannot use the latest medical treatment. Having a
health
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 life is one of the
first
 rights in human societies and in my opinion you should not pay
money
 for your
first
 rights.
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, you never pay for air. I know that
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money
 performs a key role in life but poverty should not be the reason for sickness. If someone wants to use the latest methods in the world for
health
 care, he can do it with his own
money
 but normal treatments should be free for everyone. As discussed in the above paragraphs I totally agree with the idea that
healthcare
service
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 must be free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Basic human right
  • Socio-economic status
  • Early diagnosis
  • Medical attention
  • Disparities
  • Economic benefits
  • Productive population
  • Financial ruin
  • Medical expenses
  • Trade-offs
  • Limitations
  • Highly specialized treatments
  • Subsidized
  • Prioritize
  • Innovation
  • Private partnerships
  • Affordable medical solutions
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