Nowadays, lots of
people
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to care about things of themselves. Some
people
believe that traditional
society
is better.
However
, whether or not
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to the older values of respect for the family and community is a controversial issue. I deeply disagree with
this
idea.
It is clear that the current
society
is more
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than before.
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means that with improving technology,
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life is better than before.
People
who
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in
this
world
can feel more
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, safe and happy.
For example
,
people
can buy everything they want at home without
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to the supermarket.
People
can travel
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everywhere in one day.
People
also
can make an appointment with a doctor
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.
Therefore
, nowadays, the
world
that all the
people
living in is better than the old
society
. Maybe nobody
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to return to the old one.
Moreover
,
people
need to care about their own things.
Such
as jobs, environment and family. Since they are living in a full of
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world
. Especially young
people
who have strong pressure.
This
not means
people
are individual
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and
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. Lots of
people
like to deliver aid to others when they really need help.
For instance
, Japan happened an earthquake in 2011,
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lot of
people
around
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sent
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and water to Japan. The traditional values
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respect for the family and community, but too
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rules lat the
society
cannot improve.
In conclusion,
although
the older and more traditional values have
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. We should look forward and believe with technology increasing and higher educational
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, the
world
must be
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.