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CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

#children #parents’ #advice
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guardians
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children
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parents
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experience
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experience
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knowledge
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knowledge
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what ever
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 activities they do for that
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pupils
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 about any
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 from their
parents
. So,
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children
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 are not taking any
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children
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, Many
parents
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children
childern
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children
for
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a
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 right things.
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, during childhood
children
 want to do skating but without taking help from
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parents
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parents
 they are not able to learn how they skate. As
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,
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plenty
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children
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 life. To explain it, in childhood so many things are
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 or guidance.
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of
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amusement
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although
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advice to
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children
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  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
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