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reckon that contemporary
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less communicative. I firmly believe that modern
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us to interact with society less.
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side of the country or world,
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we can assume that modern
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to interact with anyone from anywhere.
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easy as it looks. While we indeed have
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although
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communication.
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entertainment applications, to be precise one of them is
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can watch
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filmed by others indeed, it brings joy and fun, but
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TikTok since,
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.
On the other
statement which says contemporary devices
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us less sociable is scientifically proven.
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of investigators conducted a survey about how new technologies
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affected
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their social sphere of life, and researchers find out that respondents before owning a phone usually met with their friends 3-4 times a week,
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they slightly started to met with them less and less that they reached the value when friends saw each other 1-2 times a week the reason behind is the variety of applications that have started to tighten completely eventually,
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of their friends, and that became their communication.
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I want to say we should use devices properly since
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their goal is to make our life easier.
Instead
of saving our time
technology
started to devour it which is not good at all.
it would be great if everyone starts to utilise devices to serve them not vice versa.