Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion
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of Change the article
A number
The number
people
reckon that contemporary technology
is making people
more sociable, whereas other
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others
part
think it leads to them Change the wording
parts
to be
less communicative. I firmly believe that modern Change the verb form
being
technology
which is all around force
us to interact with society less. Correct subject-verb agreement
forces
However
, this
essay will discuss both views.
On the hand with the advent of modern technology
we start
to have opportunities that we could not imagine 30-40 years ago Wrong verb form
started
for
instance, we can have a conversation with Add the comma(s)
,for
people
who is on the
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apply
another
side of the country or world, Correct quantifier usage
other
moreover
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,moreover
people
can see each other and talk in a real time
, Add a hyphen
real-time
consequently
we can assume that modern Add a comma
,consequently
technology
makes people
more sociable by giving possibility
to interact with anyone from anywhere. Add an article
the possibility
a possibility
Therefore
, it is not that
easy as it looks. While we indeed have Correct word choice
as
a opportunities
to talk to someone by tapping buttonsCorrect the article-noun agreement
an opportunity
opportunities
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apply
although
, modern technology
brought another opportunities
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another opportunity
other opportunities
except
related Change preposition
apply
with
communication. Change preposition
to
Such
as,
entertainment applications, to be precise one of them is Remove the comma
apply
the
TikTok, Correct article usage
apply
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
app Correct article usage
an
when
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where
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an individual
the individual
individual
can watch Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
Add an article
a video
the video
video
filmed by others indeed, it brings joy and fun, but Fix the agreement mistake
videos
as a result
, more people
started to replace communication for
TikTok since, Change preposition
with
this
app also
brings fun and joy like conversation
.
Add an article
a conversation
On the other
hand
statement which says contemporary devices Add a comma
,hand
makes
us less sociable is scientifically proven. Correct subject-verb agreement
make
Number
of investigators conducted a survey about how new technologies Change the article
A number
The number
such
as,
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apply
phone
affected Fix the agreement mistake
phones
to
their social sphere of life, and researchers find out that respondents before owning a phone usually met with their friends 3-4 times a week, Change preposition
apply
however
after buying device
they slightly started to met with them less and less that they reached the value when friends saw each other 1-2 times a week the reason behind is the variety of applications that have started to tighten completely eventually, Correct article usage
the device
person
had no time to communicate with others. To give an illustration I chose Add an article
the person
a person
app
named Instagram and Correct article usage
an app
instead
of using it in a
appropriate way like texting each other unfortunately numerous Change the article
an
of
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apply
people
just like photo’s
of their friends, and that became their communication.
In Change noun form
photos
conclusion
I want to say we should use devices properly sinceAdd a comma
,conclusion
,
their goal is to make our life easier. Remove the comma
apply
Instead
of saving our time technology
started to devour it which is not good at all. Consequently
it would be great if everyone starts to utilise devices to serve them not vice versa.Add a comma
,Consequently
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