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The illustrations show a student residential building on campus in 2010 and now.

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The illustrations show a student residential building on campus in 2010 and now. Overall, since 2010 the interior of the building has become more segregated, allowing
to
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it to
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 accommodate more students. Several new parts were
also
 added to improve living conditions. In 2010 there were 3 student bedrooms, a living
room
, a kitchen and a bathroom. The building was surrounded by a green
area
 both from the north side and from the south side. By now the total
area
 of the building as well as the living
area
 has increased. The major adjustment is an extra student bedroom extending the upper left corner of the building. The new
room
 is
also
 provided with 2 exits: its own separate exit to the garden and to the hallway as others. The
room
 which is
next
 to the newly constructed one was transformed from
living
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a living
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room
 into
bedroom
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a bedroom
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. At the same, an analogue of
living
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the living
a living
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room
 -
social
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a social
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area
 - was presented in the kitchen.
Garden
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The garden
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 on the south side of the
students
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student's
students'
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acoommodation
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accommodation
 building was replaced by parking.
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