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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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well I am going to talk about some
parents
dont
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don't
 have a
lot
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time
 to spend with their
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 and
whats
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what
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 can be the
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reasons
reason
reansons
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reasons
, what can we do in
this
aspects
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 with our
parents
 and more The
time
 of our
parents
 is so valued because
his
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their
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time
 is so
limit
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 one of the
reasons
 is because
their
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of their
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work
, activities ,
work
home
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at home
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 , and they, due to so much pressure and stress at
work
, can become tired and overwhelmed and
that is
 one of the biggest
reasons
 why
parents
 can not spend much
time
 with their children another factor can be for the activities that
work
 entails, since it is an obligation for
parents
 to bring food and money home and for these
reasons
 many times you cannot enjoy much
time
 with the family. To finish, I would like to add a few words saying that for these
reasons
 we must appreciate and value the
time
 and presence of our
parents
 in our lives, since sometimes we are not very grateful for that for many
reasons
 that we come to think without meaning, but above
all
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 we must value everything they do for us.
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