Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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, activities ,
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, and they, due to so much pressure and stress at
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, can become tired and overwhelmed and
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why
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can not spend much
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with their children another factor can be for the activities that
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entails, since it is an obligation for
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to bring food and money home and for these
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many times you cannot enjoy much
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with the family. To finish, I would like to add a few words saying that for these
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we must appreciate and value the
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and presence of our
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in our lives, since sometimes we are not very grateful for that for many
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that we come to think without meaning, but above
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we must value everything they do for us.
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