It is cruel to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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locked up in zoos, it was
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are locked up, whereas in Bolivia many
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that live in the cold are living in a place where it is hot and they aren't in their
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, I would agree that they rehabilitate
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without
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