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you have an account with a bank. you recently notices that the bank has taken extra money out of your account and you are not sure why. Write a letter to the manager of the bank. in the letter: 1. describe the details of your account 2. explain the problem with your account 3. suggest, what you think the manager should do

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around a 20 per cent dropped during these eleven years. From 2004 to 2006, there was a gradual decline, reaching about 55%. In 2007 the number of homeowners increased slightly, but until 2011
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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