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Many people believe that it is a good idea to have a dress code at workplaces. ‎Do you agree or disagree with your statement? Give your opinion and ‎examples from your own experience.

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Uniforms are included in many companies for their employees and a lot of
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 good for them. In my opinion, I agree with
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 issue because it can present the identity of the organization.
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, it can decrease the economic' gap because they do not need to display their type of clothes. The uniform can represent the organization's characteristics and identity.
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,
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 will know immediately when they see what the company is. So it can recognize
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 to remember them rapidly.
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, when we see the red coat and red skirt of one airline, we will recall right away what is the name of that airline.
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, a dress code can create
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unity and harmony in the organization because every
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 dresses in the same costume.
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, they do not need to find an expensive dress for wearing.
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 to diminish the gap in the economy because each
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 might have their own paying problems.
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, because of unnecessary
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buying themselves's clothes so they will have enough money to spend on something more crucial than
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extravagant clothes. In conclusion, I totally agree with we should have a uniform for the employees because it can represent the company's outlook and decrease the gap between
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's classes. So
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 and help
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 to save their money.

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